A couple of things. First of all that was nicely edited, but my comments depend on a couple of things.
1) If that was just an opening or trailer then I can see no real problems.
2) however...if this being an AMV Hell style video means that it s a bunch of quick segments with Eva/PF clips and that was one of them, then I recommend shortening the clip. It'll make it better and not bore people. Trust me. AMV.avi suffered from that big time.
3) If this is merely a preview of one long clip to a song, keep up the good work.
Other than that, it looks good so far. Can't wait to see the finished product.